Sunday, February 20, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

This is a piece from my WIP A Soul to Take. 

“Get someone else,” she demanded.  Her knuckles turned white as she rubbed her hands along the length of her pants.  

Her aura swirled black and red, both anger and passion -- a dangerous and seductive combination.  If he played her right and manipulated her world, he would make her his.  Soon, he would be able to walk among the mortals, and she would be able to walk with him in dreams. 

“Such a nice place,” he willed the layers of time to fade, “I almost forgot what it was like to be amongst the living.”

19 comments:

  1. Love the mythological undertone here, Alyn!

    I love her apprehension, and somehow, I get the feeling she's the perfect person here whether she realizes it or not. ;-)

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  2. Intriguing six! I want to read more. Great job!

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  3. Doesn't sound like she's going to be so easy to manipulate. Should lead to some great scenes.

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  4. Ohhhh, wonderful tension building! Like the addition of the aura colors. :D

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  5. Interesting snippet. I'm intrigued! I'll be back for more next week.

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  6. uh-oh! Can't decide if he's good or bad. Both would be better!

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  7. Wow, he is really ignoring her wishes. Hope he gets his.

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  8. Great snippet! I'd love to see more.

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  9. Very nice! I really liked this snippet. Will she let him take her over?

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  10. He's such an interesting character. Auras, willing the layers of time to fade. Can't wait to read more.

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  11. "amongst the living" Does that mean he's a ghost?

    I really like this, and at least it sounds like she knows what he's up to, or has just learned of it.

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  12. I loved this. The manipulation...there's so much tension there. great job

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  13. I thought I'd read this last night. Maybe not.

    But it's got me intrigued. I want to find out more about him walking with mortals and having her walk with him in dreams.

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  14. I'm intrigued! Thanks for sharing!

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  15. Intriguing six--definite predator alert!

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