Sunday, September 26, 2010

Six Sentence Sundays

09/26/2010

This piece is from my novel that I recently submitted to an agent. 

      As people walked past me, I drowned out the sounds of the passing cars and the shouts from my friends.  The background faded into a blur as the wind blew behind me as if to push me to my destination faster than I had anticipated.  A gentle hint of Old Spice lingered under my nose, and I walked right through the comforting odor that reminded me of my brother.  The smell intensified and the remnants of my brother’s spray-painted signature remained on the wall of the bakery.  A heavy pang tore at my heart when the line of blue, the rival gang’s color, was painted straight across his name. I bit down the anger and rushed to school.

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4 comments:

  1. Vivid and powerful. Great descriptions of how grief numbs.

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  2. Vivid and moving. Great description of how grief numbs in some ways, heightens senses in others. Good luck with the submission

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  3. This is an awesome excerpt. So powerful. It was worth waiting to comment on!

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  4. Wow. What a powerful excerpt. Good luck on the agent hunt.

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