This is an excerpt from my WIP, Yours to Keep.
We all carry around luggage. Mine is pretty, decorated with flowers but, the stuff inside is dark. This is why there is three locks on it. However I've learned that sometimes the best locks in the world do a poor job. The past always creeps out. And once it's out, the damage proves to be catastrophic.
Wow, great set up! Can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteI am very intrigued by the dark baggage within.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing, how she compares her life to a suitcase..."the past always creeps out."
ReplyDeleteInteresting. Now I'm wondering what my luggage looks like on the outside.
ReplyDeleteGreat six! And so true, the past always comes to light.
ReplyDeleteGreat six. I really like the "decorated with flowers" imagery.
ReplyDeleteWow. Very poignant!
ReplyDeleteWonderful six. No one can change or run from their past. Good job.
ReplyDeleteOkay, I'll bite - really interesting!
ReplyDeleteThis is great! Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteTerrific hook
ReplyDeleteI can feel the foreboding here...love the analogy of the baggage/luggage...
ReplyDeleteLove the contrast between the flowery outside and the dark inside. :)
ReplyDeletesometimes locks break, and what's in the suitcase comes spilling out -- has me wondering what will spill out of her case. nice set up :)
ReplyDeleteSuch a great setup. Love all the imagery and symbolism.
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