Tairyn reached for the rusted torch anchored to the granite wall of the mausoleum. Upon her touch, a single flame roared to life, and she turned it counter clockwise. A low creak echoed as the concrete barrier gave way. Decades of musk and stale air rushed out of the darkened abyss. She quickly brought her hand up to shield her eyes as the dust forced several coughs that shook her lungs, and then she cast a quick glance over her shoulder to make sure no one saw her. Instinctively, she dismantled the torch, held it out in front of her, and walked into the unknown chamber.
Wow! Great description. Nice suspense.
ReplyDelete(Oh, yeah. And the heroine's name is absolutely perfect. Just sayin')
Ooo, this is very intriguing. What lurks in the depths of the unknown chamber?
ReplyDeleteOh, I love stories with dark tunnels and flaring torches!
ReplyDeleteLiked this - want to know what she finds down there in the 'darkened abyss'. :)
ReplyDeleteIntriguing! Keep 'em coming!
ReplyDeleteI could totally see this scene happening, from the darkness, to the torch, to the dust, all so vivid.
ReplyDeleteAnd then what!?? Six isn't enough. Can we have 16 sentence sundays??
ReplyDeleteVery intriguing. I want more of this next week!!
ReplyDeleteSpooky. Definitely want to know what happens.
ReplyDeleteFull of mystery and suspense...more please!
ReplyDeleteAnd.... Another case where six sentences were too few ;) Excellent writing!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting. Good detail.
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