Sunday, February 20, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

This is a piece from my WIP A Soul to Take. 

“Get someone else,” she demanded.  Her knuckles turned white as she rubbed her hands along the length of her pants.  

Her aura swirled black and red, both anger and passion -- a dangerous and seductive combination.  If he played her right and manipulated her world, he would make her his.  Soon, he would be able to walk among the mortals, and she would be able to walk with him in dreams. 

“Such a nice place,” he willed the layers of time to fade, “I almost forgot what it was like to be amongst the living.”
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19 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 20, 2011 at 12:22 AM

    Ooh intriguing! I like it

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  2. Layna PimentelFebruary 20, 2011 at 12:24 AM

    Love the mythological undertone here, Alyn!

    I love her apprehension, and somehow, I get the feeling she's the perfect person here whether she realizes it or not. ;-)

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  3. AnonymousFebruary 20, 2011 at 1:45 AM

    Great descriptions. Lovely.

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  4. Sarah GrimmFebruary 20, 2011 at 5:26 AM

    Intriguing six! I want to read more. Great job!

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  5. Jessica E. SubjectFebruary 20, 2011 at 6:11 AM

    Doesn't sound like she's going to be so easy to manipulate. Should lead to some great scenes.

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  6. Ann MayburnFebruary 20, 2011 at 6:28 AM

    Ohhhh, wonderful tension building! Like the addition of the aura colors. :D

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  7. AnonymousFebruary 20, 2011 at 6:37 AM

    Interesting snippet. I'm intrigued! I'll be back for more next week.

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  8. Ella DrakeFebruary 20, 2011 at 6:40 AM

    uh-oh! Can't decide if he's good or bad. Both would be better!

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  9. AnonymousFebruary 20, 2011 at 9:50 AM

    Wow, he is really ignoring her wishes. Hope he gets his.

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  10. Sarah GrimmFebruary 20, 2011 at 11:03 AM

    Great snippet! I'd love to see more.

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  11. Chrystalla ThomaFebruary 20, 2011 at 12:01 PM

    Very nice! I really liked this snippet. Will she let him take her over?

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  12. UnknownFebruary 20, 2011 at 1:13 PM

    He's such an interesting character. Auras, willing the layers of time to fade. Can't wait to read more.

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  13. CasiFebruary 20, 2011 at 2:31 PM

    "amongst the living" Does that mean he's a ghost?

    I really like this, and at least it sounds like she knows what he's up to, or has just learned of it.

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  14. Jayel KayeFebruary 20, 2011 at 4:23 PM

    I loved this. The manipulation...there's so much tension there. great job

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  15. Taryn KincaidFebruary 20, 2011 at 5:13 PM

    I thought I'd read this last night. Maybe not.

    But it's got me intrigued. I want to find out more about him walking with mortals and having her walk with him in dreams.

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  16. Lauri J OwenFebruary 20, 2011 at 5:33 PM

    I'm intrigued! Thanks for sharing!

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  17. Lex ValentineFebruary 20, 2011 at 10:16 PM

    He sounds so hot and deep!

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  18. Lynne MurrayFebruary 20, 2011 at 10:38 PM

    Intriguing six--definite predator alert!

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  19. Pip GreenFebruary 21, 2011 at 12:16 PM

    Intriguing. :)

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